Flowers in the Sun (Sonnet)by Aoi_Kaigara / Seaphyre Soft petals float through the sky, in the wind.Fly away and leave nothing but a scent.These wind gusts float more, I caught one and grinned.Aren’t they a beautiful, pleasing accent? The Sun looks large on this colored field.It is like I am dreaming in deep sleep,Not knowing when I’ll wake up all healed.Think I will take this pedal for safe keep. All flowers sway, side to side, every way.One’s scent is enough to be satisfied.The sky and the sun, where the flowers play.The beauty lets go of thoughts pacified. The Sun glows large upon the huge orange sky.The flowers in the Sun, build numbers, fly. Please leave a comment with any constructive criticism! Thank you very much!
I'm not poetic enough to offer constructive criticism, but I like it. Why is it called "flowers of the sun," but the last line says "flowers in the sun?"
That's a good point! I didn't notice it myself. I guess I'll change that. Thanks for pointing that out! And thanks for your kind words!
