Thought I'd Share Somethin' Fun of A Poem Called "Rain"

Aoi_Kaigara's "Rain"

I wish I was rain.

So I could touch someone’s skin,

And feel what they feel.

I wish I was rain.
The soothing sound of its voice
Calls for one to play.

I wish I was rain.

The soothing touch as it falls

On top of my face.

I wish I was rain.

As it touches my own skin

And feels what I feel.

I wish I was rain.
So I could fall in puddles
And make a large flood.

I wish I was rain.

So my flood could wash away

The fears of children.

I wish I was rain.

So the children play with me.

Play in my puddles.

I wish I was rain.
A rainbow could form from me
...And a bit of light.

I wish I was rain.

I could get along with light

And form a beauty.

I wish I was rain.

In movies it’s a sad sight.

A real life beauty.

I wish I was rain.
To satisfy movie scenes.
A sense of feeling.

I wish I was rain.

As I would fall from the clouds,

I’d watch the world.

Im Speechless

Pretty cool.
A subject I have not seen addressed before by poetry or prose. But I like it!

Thanks, you guys!

I like how each stanza is centered differently its unique

Thanks!

Hahaha, I have to reread the poem now, reading your name instead.

Wow! Nicely done, BlueShell! Very subtle... I'm delighted, and I'm impressed!

The slightly asymmetrical yet very natural feeling of the waka rythm, the appolinairian calligram, the drone-like quality of the épanaphore (-couldn't find the translation in english-), all that blends marvelously in a very poetic rain.

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Lol. Thank you!

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Thanks!